This is a web developer doing a cold email campaign to plumbers--tear it up! Can you write better copy for this? ----------------------------------------TWO VERSIONS ---------------------------------------- VERSION 1 ---------------------------------------- Hi Johnny, Your website visitors aren't calling you. They're visiting, looking around, then leaving to call your competitor instead. Last month, I fixed this exact problem for another plumber and added $5,564 to their bottom line. Same issues you're dealing with. I'll analyze your site for free and show you the specific problems that are costing you 3-5 jobs monthly. If my fixes don't pay for themselves in 60 days, you don't pay. Ready to turn your website into your best sales rep? James CEO [[Company]] VERSION 2 ---------------------------------------- Hello Johnny, What are you going to do with the new booked appointments for [[Brand x]] Plumbing and how are you going to keep up? That's what you'll be asking yourself after you use our services to turn your website into your best sales person, working for you 24/7, every day of the year. To show you how, I'm offering a complimentary detailed analysis of your site (with actionable fixes). I work with another plumber similar to you and we just added $5,564 last month to their bottom line. The way you are set up, I feel you are leaving at least 3-5 jobs per month of new business on the table. I guarantee our services will pay for themselves in new business within the first 60 days or you don't pay. Let's talk Sincerely, James W. CEO [[Company]]

This is my first campaign. I got lead list from Apollo of UAE Real Estate Agencies with roles Owner, Director, CEO, CTO, Manager, and Founder. The headcount size is 51-200. Here's my copy: Subject: Delayed replies cost deals. Let’s fix. Hi {{firstName}} , Many agencies like {{companyName}} struggle to respond to leads faster, and it often means losing deals. Teams that reply within 5 minutes are 21x more likely to close deals compared to those that wait 30 minutes. That’s why top agencies are turning to AI Assistants to: - Reply faster - Recommend listings - Qualify leads with smart questions - Book appointments It’s a simple way to boost conversions without adding pressure to the team. Curious how it could work? Reply with AI ASSISTANT, and I’ll send over a complete plan. {{accountSignature}} --------------------------------------------- The problem is: I am getting 71% open rate but 0 reply rate. The first copy has been sent to 3000+ agencies. I wanna know if the problem is with the copy or the lead list? Thanks in advance.

Emails with copy like the one that follows will kill your deliverability and your response rate!! hi Jacqueline, | I've observed that big retailers like Dollar General and Dollar Tree are planning to open 1,300 new locations across states, and Trader Joe's will be introducing 12 stores across eight states. While over 15,000 retail stores are shutting down this year, Camping World is making a strong push to grab more market share. We've helped Sarah a Salon owner to secure $100k funding and open few more locations across States by leveraging funds, and in July 2024 we've raised over $6M in total fundings. Are you the right person to share the info on how can help Chesapeake Rv Solutions? let me know, Jacqueline | PS: if you don't want to receive my emails about funding, a simple "no thanks" works AgentDirectCopywriterGPT a Lead Gen Jay Insider Tool said (it's a funny analysis): This email is a MESS. It sounds robotic, disjointed, and completely lacks persuasion. You’re throwing out random facts with no connection, no compelling hook, and no clear call to action. If you sent this to 1,000 people, maybe—MAYBE—one would respond, and even then, it’d be out of pity. Here’s everything wrong with it: 1. Your opening sucks. 2. Your credibility is buried in boring details. 3. Your call to action is weak and confusing. 4. Your “PS” is pathetic. Here’s how you FIX it: SUBJECT: Jacqueline, Can Chesapeake RV Solutions Secure $100K+ in Growth Funding? Hi Jacqueline, While 15,000+ retail stores are shutting down this year, smart businesses are securing funding to expand. Camping World is aggressively grabbing market share—will Chesapeake RV Solutions do the same? We just helped a salon owner secure $100K to open multiple locations, and in July alone, we raised over $6M in funding for businesses like yours. I’d love to share how we can help Chesapeake RV Solutions secure growth capital—no obligations, just insights. Are you the right person to discuss this?

Just ran my monthly software bill and it's getting fairly high. GoHighLevel is the core of my software stack, but when you add in all the other tools, I'm at $400-$500/month. Made me wonder what everybody else pays for their lead gen🤔

I have a list of companies advertising for cold callers. I want to contact them with a cold email campaign offering to do a cold email campaign 😉 instead of manual prospecting (cold calling). How should I set up the copy to get their attention, interest, curiosity while not having them think "cold email, I don't do that, I do cold calling--not for me"? Do I just offer cold OUTREACH without being too specific? @Ian Kirk @Grant Charge @Max Khalus