Please help and review my email copy? · Lead Generation Secrets

Please help and review my email copy?

Okay so this is attempt for the first cold email.

I would really appreciate if the Group could critic and feedback. We're providing an HR solution and service for businesses in Health & Social Care in the UK.

Subject: Rising NI costs? Here’s a fix.

Hey [First Name],

I know care providers like [Company Name] are being hit hard by rising National Insurance contributions, staff costs, and the constant challenge of agency spend and overtime.

We’ve been helping care homes and healthcare providers like Guy’s & St Thomas’ and Precious Homes reduce their reliance on agency staff and cut costs by up to 20%, all while improving staff retention.

Curious, how are you currently managing workforce costs while keeping retention stable?

Would it be worth a quick chat to see if we could help [Company Name] do the same?

Best regards,

Thanks in advance Group!

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