Pre-sell post in the wild (line by line breakdown)
I posted this a few days ago in my own Skool group. It was a pre-sell post that I used a few days before I launched my new paid Skool group for Christian Businessmen. It had a good reception and led to a few good conversations/sales. It did its job⦠Letās jump into the post and see what I did right⦠(Parenthesis = my analysis). Non parenthesis = part of the post. Hopefully this is easy enough to read doing it like this but if this format sucks let me know and I will figure something else out. I was living a double life⦠(Present Pain Hook⦠immediate symptom) Sunday morning I'd sit in church feeling peace. (Heaven Island Setupā¦contrast) Monday morning I'd make business decisions that made my stomach turn. (Hell Island Symptom⦠"stomach turn" is physical and pointable) (Present Pain⦠happening NOW, not future worry) (Contrast⦠Sunday peace vs Monday stomach turning creates the gap) The pressure to perform. To provide. To compete. (Hell Island Symptoms⦠three specific pressures building momentum) (Symptomatic⦠each one is something they can point to) It was eating me alive. (Present Pain) Like there were two versions of me⦠The calm and faithful guy that a dad and husband is supposed to be. (Heaven Island⦠who they want to be) And the one who showed up more often, the anxious hustling business guy who was constantly worried it was all going to crumble. (Hell Island⦠who they actually are RIGHT NOW) (Present Pain⦠"showed up more often" = current state) My kids saw the stressed version more than the steady one. (Price/Cost⦠what staying on Hell Island is costing them) (Movie Scene⦠can visualize kids watching stressed dad) My wife got the leftover scraps of me after I'd burned all my energy on worry. (Price/Cost⦠another consequence of present pain) (Symptomatic⦠"leftover scraps" is visceral and visual) And I felt like a fraud. (Hell Island Emotion⦠names the shame without creating it) How could I call myself a man of faith when I was running my business on pure anxiety? (the gap between who they are and who they want to be)