@Issy McCann thank you. My aim was to get across that the main character (hitman Kieran Mullane) has lost his way as work has taken over his life. I want the reader to care because I think this is something people can identify with - becoming so detached from who you are due to who you’ve become. (I wrote this during a particularly tough time at work) But if that isn’t immediately clear, its very useful to know. My hope was that by the 6,000 word mark (next 2 chapters) that’s fully established so that the inciting incident (a man he has just killed says ‘thank you’ before he fires the final shot) is both intriguing and makes sense to drive the character and story forward. I think I’m babbling now sorry.

@Kathryn Brown this is interesting - very good to see another dark comedy writer. Can I ask what your book is about? I’d love to hear some more

I received mine yesterday. The feedback was incredibly thorough and captured exactly what I was attempting to achieve. As a first time writer it’s deeply reassuring and heartwarming in equal measures. The feedback where I could improve centred around building an overarching story as it isn’t clear in what I submitted - this was intentional as the inciting incident doesn’t fit within the competition word count. Unsure whether I should take that as positive or that it needs to happen earlier within the first 2 chapters of my book. Thanks to @Issy McCann for reviewing my submission. I’m so so happy with your feedback.

For writing I’ve used AI to work through concepts for some absurd scenarios I was writing. I find it useful for giving odd prompts with no real logical conclusion to see what sense (if any) AI can make. For writing dark humour/absurdist comedy it’s been quite useful

@James Blair hiya, this sounds fascinating. How did you write a choice based game? I enjoy playing these but never found a way of tackling writing my own

@James Blair brilliant, thank you - I’ll look into it