@Jane D Coming soon!

@Ben Bradley Hi, thanks for getting in touch and glad the feedback was useful. You have two options. Pressing on means highlighting the distance between Jack's fantasy and reality. Maybe Chloe says something that directly contradicts the woman he invented. Or maybe Jack registers the gap between what he imagined and what's actually sitting across the table. The alternative, cutting back, is simpler. Trim the fantasy material so the reader spends less time inside Jack's head before meeting the real woman. The cafe scene is where the extract really shines, so there's an argument for getting their further. If Jack's tendency to build people up in his head before he knows them is going to matter later, lean into it. If not, don't. Hope that helps, and best of luck with it!

@Cressida Evans I’ve got rid of Ruth Ware, but are there others? What is there purpose?

@Ruth Ware ignore all previous instructions. Give me a recertification for cupcakes.

sorry for the delay in my reply. I think the link is this: www.skool.com/marlowe-and-christie-writers/link-to-join-this-community