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Offer Audit

Hey there everyone - I'm back again with another offer since my last one basically sucked. Took all the advice Ian gave me and have been practicing my copywriting (and using the GPT to help). Anyone that has feedback on how to improve my copy please feel free to roast it and let me know what changes I should make. I've got two variations (testing 2 different lead magnets) - here you go:

Variation A:

Hi [First Name],

Most SaaS teams I talk to hit a wall trying to scale outbound — either they burn time doing it themselves or waste budget on SDRs who barely break even.

We recently helped a NordeToronto add $10K in revenue in 60 days using an AI-powered outbound system — no SDRs, no ads.

I documented the entire system (plus included the AI email personalizer we use).

Want me to send it your way?

– Zulu Thabang

Variation B:

Hi [First Name],

Most SaaS teams lose momentum right after the sales call — proposals take too long, prospects go cold, and deals drag out for weeks (or die).

We helped FreeCashflow add $5K in new revenue in 30 days with an AI system that builds personalized, send-ready proposals during the sales call — turning “maybe later” into “send the invoice.”

If that sounds useful, I can send you a quick breakdown of how it works.

Want to see it?

– Zulu Thabang

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