Review my email: Email for Fat loss supplement - Google Docs

Could you share your feedback on my approach and let me know which parts could be improved?

Yooooooooo, wassup 4D family. Some of you already know, but I know a lot of you don't. If you want your copy/outreach reviewed, or your questions answers by a 6-figure copywriter on my team, then join the FREE live calls 2x per week. They're held in the Discord community stage every Wednesday and every Saturday, both at 9 AM EST. The review calls are always recorded and posted in the #resources channel of the Discord, but you should show up if you can so you can get your own stuff reviewed. Plus, I pop in there from time to time. Here's the link to the Wednesday call in Discord - https://discord.com/events/1053093919816175646/1364896078800879616 Here's the link to the Saturday call in Discord - https://discord.com/events/1053093919816175646/1363784979435225209 Like always, take notes. Your #1 fan, Professor 4D. P.S. These calls are held in the "Pickle Stage", see the screenshot below.

What should I say next? What angle should I create? Note: Prospect offers 1on1 coaching to combat athletes. Isn't doing anything w emails rn.

From now on, Every month or so I will create a new post like this and you can submit your copy or outreach in the comments below. Other people will still be able to review it, And you can still leave comments to each other, While we make everything more organized. Here is the template for how you should share your copy: "<type of copy> in <niche>: <link>" Example: 3 Emails in the fitness niche: <link> Here is the template for how you should share your outreach: "<type of outreach>: <link>" Example: Instagram DM outreach: <link> Now share your copy and outreach in the comments below until the end of the week, And make sure you come here to review other people's copy & outreach as well! That's it for this update. Costin.