Review my email: Email for Fat loss supplement - Google Docs

I wrote an fb ad for fat loss supplement. My first ad. So I don't know what to write. I am thinking of sending this ad to the prospect and asking for some email work. Kindly review it, and if possible, mention some links on tutorials for Facebook ads. also tell me where I can read some good ads, and don't mention fb ad library, something else. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WHo7Sf9uuRruR4zGLXsB8C0YQIlypv43yU8cdF5iHNE/edit?usp=sharing

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Hello fellow copywriter I just wrote an email. Please review it https://docs.google.com/document/d/1TtfEaVlVwHbupGc9pvaVZbXtxPdiqz5m27-1hsiU1Rs/edit?usp=sharing