Instantly's AI 🤖Copywriting✍️ is Atrocious!! Can You See the Problem ⛔?
I was on a Clarity Call with @Alexander Kolchinsky yesterday after his post: About Facebook Ads and Cold Email. He was seeing 25% go to SPAM 🚫 and was pointing the finger👉 at Microsoft. I asked him to let me see his copy? He insisted that it was fine since it was written by Instantly's AI and their support told him it was a Microsoft thing. Finally he sent over his copy!! Can you See the Problem? What Instantly AI Wrote: Subject: helping students + growing your revenue = win-win Salutations Cecilio, Your organization's dedication to empowering marginalized communities through education and healthcare initiatives is truly inspiring. Keep up the amazing work! Our math school had numerous questions from parents asking, “Do you also offer music lessons?” Consequently, I’ve been sending them to my partners who specialize in music education. This strategy has proven to be quite effective. Another partner experienced a 30% boost in student sign-ups after implementing my referral program. (And perhaps a few future rockstars in the making.) This could be a great opportunity for you as well—together, we can connect with more students and create lasting success, and a nice commission for every referral you make. Let me know if you'd like to explore this further—I’d be happy to share more. Alexander Kolchinsky CEO @ Russian Math Tutors Phone: (408) 960-5333 Address: 389 Huckleberry Dr. San Jose, CA 95123 P.S. Cecilio, if you don't wish to receive further emails from me, simply reply with the word 'unsubscribe,' and I’ll ensure you’re removed from my list. Sent from my iPhone. 🤕 I got a headache just looking at that CRAP 💩 My Rewrite: Subject: How Music Helped Jonnie Learn Math!! Did I see that you help underprivileged kids in your local community {{firstName}}? That touched my heart!! I teach Math!!! I KNOW Super Boring, to a music teacher, but I’ve found that Students who learn to play an instrument begin to grasp math as well.