Hey @Coleen Huebert I think it's very honourable helping people in this space, I know it affects many and that's worldwide, Here is the UK people suffer with it a lot in rented home and accommodation. I think you have some good formatting with you about page, I am slightly concerned on how much you talk about pricing in the sense that $1200 for a course but you're giving that away for free? My question as a user would be "Where did she get that reference from?" It kind of seems like it's been plucked out of thin air. similar to the other prices, so may don't focus on the courses side and price, where you can really dig deep into the fact that you've experienced it and know how it feels, really go for the feeling and empathy side of things. You've done really well with your video, it might be a bit too long, potentially create another shorter video summarising what the community is and then have the current video as a 2nd video within your assets. (Also try to film with a window in front of you and not behind you, @Mona Weathers can help you with that as she's a pro! I think you should also talk in the first person, this is a personal community that you've ACTUALLY been though, instead of "She" mention "I have been through this" "I'm a survivor" "I struggled with this and found out..." etc. Hope that makes sense and isn't too harsh lol I'm always happy to chat and have my own marketing community where you can learn from me, other marketeers, business and community owners all learning and growing together! The Marketing Common Room

I think it's interesting to hear about what you do @Kingsley Mirieri A couple of points from me. 1. I think it's a really personal group and for you I think having real photos might help more, the slide you've made look like they are made from AI (Which is okay to use) I feel having less stock imagery and more real people in real situations could really help get more people through the door. Even if it's pictures of you and your friends and family. 2. I think you should reformat slightly, think about what benefits you're providing, people want to know what they get from you and then the story afterwards. Start with "Is your life showing consistent victory, or are you just surviving?" This is a good hook and really grabs your attention, then you can go back into why they should join. Hope this helps mate and I'm always happy to chat and you're more than welcome to join my community about marketing where you can learn, get feedback and we can all grow together! The Marketing Common Room

Thanks @Paulo Costa, The Roaster @Sumit Sharma I really like your story and it really does bring that natural relationship building and connection. I think all that needs to happen is some potential reordering. It's great to learn about you and how far you've come and what a cools story, but sadly I think people might just scroll past that to get to the "What is in it for me" section, try to start off with a what your offer is and how you help people. Then you can maybe cut back to why and how you've had this great experience and become a solo entrepreneur etc. Hope that helps and I'd love to have you in my community and I know your expertise would be invaluable, It's called The Marketing Common Room it's all about learning marketing and helping each other and growing together!

@Sumit Sharma

Thanks for the tag @Joe Sargent I really appreciate it