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Be Not Discouraged (Hymn for Feedback)
Hey everyone! This is a new hymn I’m working on. I just started it yesterday, so I’d love any thoughts you have on where it could be improved.
In addition to feedback on the text, I’d also love your input on what tune to use for it. I think I’ve narrowed it down to two options, both of which are already familiar to our congregation. I’ve uploaded a recording of me singing the lyrics to each tune, so I’d love to hear which you think suits the text better! BEACH SPRING is one of my favorite public domain tunes, and ROAN ROAD is one that I wrote.
The recordings are just to show the tunes, so I'd probably do a tag or something else musical at the end of each one to make the ending feel less abrupt.
REVISED TEXT (6/25)
Oh, my soul, be not discouraged
By the trials that you face
For your Shepherd goes before you
And has numbered all your days.
He will guide you through the tempest,
He will guard you from the flame,
He will keep you from all evil,
He will hold you in His grace.
Oh, my soul, be not disheartened
By this life’s uncertainties
For your Shepherd knows your weakness
And supplies your every need.
He who clothes and feeds the sparrows
Will provide your daily bread.
He will give you strength and wisdom,
He will lift your weary head.
Come, my soul, and lay your burdens
At the faithful Shepherd’s feet.
Bring your grief and bring your failures,
Bring your troubles and defeats.
He will bear your every sorrow
As He bore your every sin;
He who bled for your redemption
Calls you now to rest in Him.
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ORIGINAL TEXT (6/24)
Oh, my soul, be not discouraged
By the trials that you face
For your Shepherd goes before you
And has numbered all your days.
He will guide you through the tempest,
He will guard you from the flame,
He will keep you from all evil,
He will hold you in His grace.
Oh, my soul, be not disheartened
By the things you cannot see;
For your Shepherd knows your weakness
And supplies your every need.
He who clothes and feeds the sparrows
Will provide your daily bread.
He will give you strength and wisdom,
He will lift your weary head.
Come, my soul, and lay your burdens
At the faithful Shepherd’s feet.
Bring your sins and bring your failures,
Let Him meet your every need.
He will bear your every sorrow
As He bore your every sin;
He who bled for your redemption
Calls you now to rest in Him.
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Be Not Discouraged (Hymn for Feedback)
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