This is a lesson in "it's NOT purty words that make it rain for auctions (or any offer)!"
Yes, the copy could be more specific.
Yes, it's lacking "plan".
Notice how it DOES use present pain!
Notice the "words" are purty good.
But not ONE BID!
And this fella has got 6500 followers on FB.
To figure this out...
You need to put yourself in the READERS SHOES!
You won't "get it" by studying the copy.
There is a big shark with gnarly teeth in the water.
Do you SEE it?
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Rooting For Ya,
Travis
PS Hint: This copy would work better in an email. WHY?
PPS I've made this mistake when making offers too. No shade on this fella at all.