@Nat Carey Ok, here it goes... suggestions: Add one concrete credibility anchor after "I've lived it." Like a single line about what you changed or what you draw on coukd convert the empathy part into authority. Second, you could rewrite the bullets so at least three describe what a member actually does or gets, not what he becomes. Third, you could lead with the tangible (the 30-min reset, the live coaching, the specific tools) and let the identity outcome sit underneath as the payoff, not the promise. Fourth, you may want to move or trim the results paragraph so the reader understands the "how" before the "what you'll get." Fifth, "Tap or click the join button to get started" Emojis and I dont get along so, in my opinion... Maybe cut the emoji down to one, or none as your writing is strong enough to carry itself, and the restraint would match the seriousness of what your actually selling/offering. Hope this helps and again, only my opinion. I have had to play around with mine a lot.

@Josef Sandling Well, I am not the best roaster, so, your about page looks good to me, flows well. Your daughter is cute! I guess I would ask about using your real daughter pic vs the AI one. The videos are easy to understand and informative. Great start!

@Josef Sandling You are welcome. Yes, for sure, makes sense. Thanks, you as well.

@Eloise Ansell Great to hear! OK, yes, I never thought of doing that as I didn't think I would be starting an online community, let alone taking a dive into social media to start a business requiring testimonials. Thank you, Eloise!

@Jack Robinson hey Jack, thank you for the roast and I will implement the bullet points and review the video. Thank you!

@Jack Robinson wow, congratulations!