Had a quick read, bro and here's my thoughts: 1. The first 3 opening lines are phrased fairly awkwardly, and it is clear that you're not a native English speaker. 2. The "she's a great woman" line isn't cutting it. — The prospect doesn't care if she's a great woman; they want to know why she is qualified to teach them about email marketing and, more specifically, subject lines 3. Don't skip the opportunity to enhance your subject line with a secondary subject line as Nabeel recommends in Profitable AF Emails. 4. You didn't mention that her script is free, and cut the email abruptly, which means you're missing an opportunity to persuade them. 5. Lastly, don't forget to write in the voice and style of the guru. I don't think Chris ends his emails with "best regards" — it's a bit too formal for his list. Don't let this discourage you, though. The main thing is you're trying and looking to improve— keep putting in the reps :)!

Nice stuff, man— just one thing, don't position yourself as a "freelancer" as it lowers your perceived value. Maybe try, this is exactly "what I've done for coaches in a similar niche", and if you haven't, then you can say this "is what other successful coaches in your niche are doing and are seeing x results"

@Federico Gandolfo Tbh it depends where they're from — Gen Z in my rural town definitely still fish and I grew up fishing too but I imagine a large share of the market are older in age.

nice man— the way you're breaking it down is the translation method, right?