@Paulo Costa, The Roaster Kirby has definitely built an impressive community, and there's no denying that. At the same time, I don't think a large member count automatically means every strategy is the right fit for every community. Different communities have different goals. What works for a community with 44,000+ members may not be the best approach for someone just starting out or trying to improve conversions. For me, the goal of an About Page is simple: clearly communicate the outcome, explain how you'll help, provide proof, and give people a reason to join. I know for a fact that my about pages will convert, but only if people send traffic to them and I have testimonials to prove that. There is a lot more to do with about pages than what people think. I did, @Steve Atencio; he had 188 and now has 200. Put a search term in for his niche and see where he sits. A.I is the easy way out. I have testimonials how good they are working and I have not had one not work; the key send traffic, and it will convert

@Steve Atencio You're not the only one that has said that about the process. I have @Aimee Jardon was the same way. People that are not in this community say the same thing

@Ian Bosler See if this helps? Ian strong opening. "Trapped in marketing tech overwhelm, spiralling software costs and wasting time on tactics that yield zero predictable returns" is specific and your ideal member will feel that immediately. The 3,000 business owners credential lands well too. Nine problems on the page though: (1) "Revenue Operating System" brand language with no explanation, means nothing to a new reader (2) "Outperform over tech" grammatically awkward, weakens the credibility the rest of the page works hard to build (3) Only 3 bullets inside thin for a 10-day program (4) "Highly profitable customer journeys" vague, no specific member result attached (5) "Predictable revenue engine" no number or timeframe to make it believable (6) What it feels like inside is missing "Support & Human Feedback" is functional not warm (7) First sentence burns prime Discovery real estate with no anchor search terms (8) Missing search terms marketing strategy, business growth, lead generation, sales funnel, digital marketing all absent (9) Dense opening sentence — too much jargon for someone already overwhelmed by marketing tech (10) Fixing one still leaves eight more. If you want all nine addressed at once drop me a message. Fixing one still leaves eight more. If you want all nine addressed at once drop me a message.

@Artworqq Kevin Suber See what you can get from this "One of the most powerful AI marketing platforms available today" that's a claim that needs proof or a source. Who says it's one of the most powerful? Without that it reads like marketing copy not a credible recommendation. A skeptic will clock it immediately. The pivot from Blaze AI to your framework is abrupt. You spend two sentences praising the platform then immediately say "the problem isn't the software." That shift is the right move but it needs a beat of transition. Right now it feels like a bait and switch even though it isn't. "The exact workflow I use" this is the strongest credibility signal in the whole piece and it's buried in the middle. Lead with this or develop it more. Why does your workflow work? What results has it produced? One specific outcome would do more work than three sentences of general praise for Blaze. No CTA. The piece ends with "a publishing system that actually works" which is a strong line but then what? Where do they go? What do they do next? One-sentence takeaway: The problem and solution are clearly framed back the Blaze claim with a source, lead with your personal results, and add a CTA. Not sure if you can get anything out of this?

@Ian Bosler See what you think: Great energy Ian and 40 years split between corporate and your own businesses is credibility that lands. "2 minute gurus peddling AI slop" is the best line in the intro keep that. Four things worth looking at though. "The way it's meant to be" goes vague right where you need to be specific. What does getting on with business and life actually look like inside The Experts Society? "My Superpower" with a capital S reads like a LinkedIn buzzword in an intro that's otherwise refreshingly anti-buzzword. You spend three sentences criticising hyped solutions then immediately offer a freebie audit with no explanation of why yours is different. That gap needs closing or a skeptic will clock it. The biography detail is the most human and memorable thing in the entire intro and it's last. An ancestor who led the Irish Rebellion and was transported to Australia in 1799 belongs earlier not as an afterthought. Four fixes. All worth doing. What do your think?

@Ian Bosler Okay, I see you join my community. I sent you a DM with the next steps

@Elliott Robertson Okay you have a link to where it is?