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@Paulo Costa, The Roaster Thanks Paul. Will do my best to give good insights, some Bon mots on occasion, and also I will give my unvarnished opinion where it warrants.

@Karin Crawford Thanks Karin!

My instagram is pretty faceless http://www.instagram.com/kafclown. I curate other peoples comedy and write about why it’s funny. I started doing it faceless, and I probably need to add more ME into it.

So I didn’t know much about you other than you were a comedian. That and the title of the song led me to believe it would be a light hearted comedy song. I thought, oh cool. But my expectations were way off. I do think the title/content and the style of the music were not in keeping with one another. I listened to some of your other songs on your YouTube channel, and liked a couple of them better/ felt there was more congruence with the titles/styles that you were going for. A little wry. The song as presented doesn’t sound wry it sounds angry. It does seem like all or many of your songs are about money and debt. Are you making an album of money songs? The song was well produced, and you seem to have a good handle on using song AI. Is this Suno, or a different tool? From an artistic perspective, I would prefer the story to either go somewhere or to (as a merry go round does) end up in the same place, but somehow changed. I feel like there’s a mismatch between the genre of the song and the ideas of the song. By the end, I don’t have a clear idea of how the guy gets off the merry go round. I think you need to lean into the merry go round aspect of it. I kind of half expected calliope music. Anyway, that’s my two cents. Keep on keeping on!

I took a look at your first page- I think your message is clear, but I think you need a better photo. You are relaxed and smiling and that is good. But your face seems slightly out of focus. Your shirt is too big. There’s wrinkles in every direction, especially around your arms. There’s a weird dot on your right elbow. Your head is cut off at the top You are wearing an undershirt underneath. And while I am not a graphic designer I think that Communicating Made Simple needs to be further away from CONFIDENT SPEAKING CLUB. It seems. Little crammed. I do like the black space behind you and on the left, but the top and the bottom of the letters seem too close.