I second what Dave and Heather said above. 😁

I agree with Paolo that some music could be good in the background, as long as it didn’t compete with the voice. But even without it, I thought it was good engaging interesting

@Jeffery Melvin that's a lot of views for early on - but nobody is following from all those views. And like I said before, a lotta views with nothing to sell is just a lotta views....

@Jeffery Melvin a book series could work, if it’s about something that people need and want in order to improve their lives. If it’s fiction, that’s a hard road because it takes building a dedicated audience. And AI is no good at writing good fiction. Keep in mind that selling it chapter by chapter Makes the cast of the final book go up more than probably the whole book would fetch on its own. 10 chapters and you’re already 10 bucks invested for a book that might sell for $4.99.

@Paulo Costa, The Roaster @Warrick Duncan I'm late to the game - and reading through the new copy without having read the original or the comments, I was thinking, "Sounds good to me!" I agree with Paolo that a quick video intro to what's inside would help a lot. The thumbnail should be your strongest hook and showing you and Toni, but not in the pose of the fellow currently there. Just you guys as normal fitness coaches, not flexing, with smiles, as if greeting a customer at the door of your gym - ie the guys inside who are going to help you. That goes straight to the video overview of the community/classroom. 30s to a minute tops. No deep dive details, just the main points - including the ones you mention in the copy. After that, people won't even need to read the copy, which is the least important element on the page for prospective customers because sales copy doesn't build trust - people do (hence reviews and seeing you are crucial). HTH

@Paulo Costa, The Roaster @Jeffery Melvin fun video and looks like a great recipe. Makes me want to try it. I'd think about having a VoiceOver for the starting shots of the garden - or else just cut those out. You talk later about the stuff coming from the garden - so maybe you cut splice those in there while you're talking about it. Otherwise, I suggest keeping the tray on the table throughout, instead of holding it at first, which is distracting. You could also make some more video with a real close up so people can see right up close. But the thing is you'll want the voice to continue uninterrupted over that. If you're relying on just the camera for audio and video at the same time and don't use editing software, then you'll need to decide what you're going to say during each shot and then put those together. Not sure how you're assembling this - a lot depends on what tools you have available and your skills there. The main thing is to keep on creating. You're making good stuff that I'm sure people will want to see once they find it - and your voice and delivery are right on, very energetic and fun. Keep on keeping on!