I've added a hypothetical example at each step in the framework so you can edit it for your offer/audience.
1. CALLOUT: Whose attention do you want
Example: Box Hill Dads!
2. HOOK: Target Problem
Example: Tired of staring at a beer belly in the mirror?
3. EDIFICATION: Social Proof
Example: For 10 years, we've been helping local dads replace the stomach "keg" with a six-pack (not the drinking kind - sorry).
4. WHAT YOU GET: 3 key features and benefits
Example: Here's what we do:
FOOD: Overhaul the menu (without getting rid of the good stuff).
WORKOUT PLAN: A simple weekly workout routine that's easy to do with a packed schedule (and zero fitness base).
SUPPORT: Keep you track and surrounded by a team of dads so the progress sticks (with plenty of room for the odd blowout).
5. HOW TO GET IT: What to do next
Example: Click the button to learn more about our "Dad's Keg to Six-Pack Community"
If this was helpful, let me know and post any questions in the comments.