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Dec '24 •
Can you review my copy? very apreciated
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1IuDvp0v7PPG7rYV9Q868AuKU83jaGQA4ZK-lsqI5UEQ/edit?usp=sharing
Dec '24 •
copy review pls
https://docs.google.com/document/d/18rMedRW9AG6Z6Rg_z2Uy94K1Mut9IAhgY3-xNgslLQI/edit?usp=sharing
0 likes • Dec '24
Hey @Tarek Makhloufi, I'm a beginner copywriter too but i think I can review some of your points. First, the title I think you need to put somthing intriguing, you can also put some numbers on it like "how I lose 20lb with 40 days", or something like that. Then, i think that putting "I would this email find you" it's not a good form to star a email, putting something more intriguing is better, or just cut it off. lastly, you can tell a story of how did you het off your "miserable" life to found the method that "saved" you! Keep it going!💪
Dec '24 •
copy review pls
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Y9Hr8OxaJcrLsVkU66X0NKG6r4tHYTFCpgyXzLsGC5k/edit?usp=sharing
0 likes • Dec '24
Hey tarek, i'm also a beginner at copywriting but I think I can maybe help you to improve your copys. So, first I think you need to work on your CTA, I think it's too "dry", secondly you say that you used a new method, but I think that you can put a name on it, and put values of how many weight did you lose, not losing all your body fat, cause that is almost impossible. That's what I think that you can improve right now, considering that I'm a beginner too! So, keep working and grinding !!💪
0 likes • Dec '24
@Tarek Makhloufi just whatching some youtube videos, like tyson 4d, tom stoinc, and alicia joseph. And personally I recomend reading the books that Tre tells you on his videos, it's very helpful
Dec '24 •
If you could Reviews my copy, I will be grateful
I just writted this copy that is a bit diferent than my usual copy, so I wanted someone to review this! much apreciated if you could help me! https://docs.google.com/document/d/10eKkS10yQ6Sxp3vPOdTxE91ytoiTbuaDkv3WE45hC2s/edit?usp=sharing
0 likes • Dec '24
@Karan Copywriter Thank you bro, i will surely take you tips and work on that! yeah english in not my first language but i'm working on that!
0 likes • Dec '24
@Tre Heart Thx tre!
Dec '24 •
Review my copy and i will do the same for you
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hBxertMVavS3sxajVgd1rJwkDTNe877ZIFQNpXMupp4/edit?usp=drivesdk
0 likes • Dec '24
hey @Lil Singh i'm not an expert on copywritting, but I think I personally would change. First to make the e-mail more personal I think you may put the name of the reader on email, secondly I think it's better on the option you said put just like 3 things that hits the emotional of the reader, like "You’re living on your terms." and "You travel, you spend time with family, you do what you love." can be submitted in the same situation. I think that's a good copy, so you can just keep going what you doing!
0 likes • Dec '24
@Lil Singh that it is, its one practice email that I did few days ago! https://docs.google.com/document/d/1o7APxrPJOlIoIoYO2l4CjAFVRcXU4u3P3bsRtWaYWvk/edit?usp=sharing
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