Feedback: Roast my email copy
Hey Gs. I am writing an cold email copy to Yelp HVAC companies to sell multichannel seed to lead system. Would love to hear your feedback on my email copy as I do not have much experience in writing emails. That's it: Hey {name} I noticed {company} on Yelp and thought I would reach out. I see you're advertising, but your response time to Yelp quotes is around 2 hours. That's not bad, but here's the thing: 70% of HVAC leads book with whoever responds first, and 12 of your San Jose competitors are getting back to their customers in under 20 minutes. I build systems that respond to leads in under 60 seconds. Calls, texts, emails, Yelp messages, all automatic and in your brand tone. Am extremely confident it'd work for you, so much so that I'd install it completely for free and only ask you to pay if it brings you 10 extra jobs in the next 45 days. Is this worth a quick chat? Alex