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ZEN STORY AND FILM ACADEMY
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16d •
Hey, everyone! When you have time before the 4th, here's a few pages...
of the beginning of a short novel I'm writing. Looking forward to also seeing pages from Justin. James, are you sharing with us a few pages you'd like us to workshop the following week, with Max? Here are my pages, attached.
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Also from the title I thought it was going to be closer to the walking dead.
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I just updated your access to editor. Hopefully that works.
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Updated pages for "Exile" pilot
Here are a couple more pages for my pilot. If you already read the last one, the new stuff starts on page 11.
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I just read the new pages so I don't know if you made changes to the last pages, but I had a question why is Eve working two jobs? Is she working towards a goal and needs more money, is this society just so expensive that everybody has to work multiple jobs, or does she have some debt that she's trying to pay off? From what you said it sounds like she's a person who is trying to do it all so I was just trying to figure out what her motivation was behind the two jobs. There was one place where you said begins to get their stuff ready at the beach or something like that.
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@Stu Jardine I'm curious what happens if people are not productive.
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@James Fleming Thanks! I will take a look at them.
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@Stu Jardine okay ignore the notes to myself from last class. Haha. I will hopefully fix those soon.
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Quick read
First attempt at a true beginning: EXT. Cefalù, Palermo, Sicily, Italy, 1919 boats moving on top of gentle waves A bird perches on a boat, taking a moment to dry his feathers and enjoy the view A rock flies at the bird, nearly missing him. The bird flutters away Luca, 7 is teaching younger brother Marco, 4 how to use a slingshot, they giggle behind their partially ajar bedroom window facing the water INT. kitchen Niccolo (father) ceases pouring his coffee, rolls eyes, makes eye contact with Gloria (mother) and sighs They proceed to the boys' bedroom and open the door. Gloria yanks both of their ears and they wail, the slingshot falls to the ground Gloria Wasn't planning on cooking seagull tonight, boys. She kneels down, grabs the slingshot and gently tucks it into her apron, gazing at the boys with equal parts pity and admiration. The boys nurse their ears on the floor Niccolo For Christ's sake! We're pescatori, not uccellatore. Luca Maybe you are, but I still haven't been out on Il Delfino! Niccolo, smiling wryly Tell you what, Luca. I'll take you out on the boat right now. Luca Oh Papa, you mean it? Niccolo Sure! And you ain't coming off until that mark you left is well sanded and painted over. How does that sound? He emphatically leads his son out of the bedroom. Luca It was Marco! Niccolo Right, he just taught himself I suppose. Niccolo nudges him out the door. Luca groans. Gloria It wasn't the worst shot I've ever seen. Marco Thanks. Gloria Go on and see if your brother could use some help. Marco eagerly makes his way to Il Delfino Gloria gazes out the window at Niccolo, Luca & Marco as if to invite a series-within-a-series
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Is this going to be in English or was this what you were saying you wanted to be in italian? I'm wondering what it would look like if you changed uccellatore to an English word, because I had to look up what that meant for it to make sense what he was saying. Also why is she gazing at her boys with admiration and pity? Pity because she hurt their ears? It's fun to see their relationship I'm excited to see what you do with it and I liked Nate's questions.
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