I hope you don't mind another's opinion since I am certainly no Dr Weir! I have only listened to your song once so far, but I really enjoyed it. I really like the melody and the chorus. Your vocal comes through clearly throughout MOST of the song, but there are a few places where it seems to get a little buried by the music. I think bringing your vocal forward just a bit in those spots would make the lyrics easier to hear and give them even more impact. I have a friend who absolutely loves music. Would it be okay if I shared your song with her?