Awesome man! Congrats on getting started! I'm happy to offer my critique, I just ask you take it all with a grain of salt because honestly, a lot of the leverage of an idea depends on how much market research you've done, and seeing how much it aligns with the demand of your market. Big issue #1 that I see is the text size. just about everything on the thumbnail is only even legible at the size you've created it at, but it'll never appear that size on anyone's feed. It's only ever going to appear at small sizes. Even on TV I don't think I'd be able to read all that on a recommended feed. The best advice I've heard for this is the "what does it look like when squinting and blurry", if you can still make out what that would be, then it's going to be more crystal clear at a glance, which is safe to assume that's all the time you'll get, on organic. Second, I'm not sure if this counts but YouTube was recently cracking down on "You'll make X amount of money doing Y" type titles. I don't know how much this fits into that. But to that same point, if you've never read Breakthrough Advertising before, glance at my notes here: https://www.skool.com/conversion-games-3073/classroom/ecef9377?md=e173907fe7fd4ac795b9eb133b38bd35 I think the title could potentially have a market sophistication issue, meaning that there's 100 other videos with almost exactly the same claim as yours, and they've been coming out for several years now. "I've heard this one before." means people will ignore it. See here: https://www.skool.com/conversion-games-3073/classroom/ecef9377?md=6d6ea3cbfafe457eb313b7f8d5fa3fee I wonder if there's a more specific way to phrase it based on the actual system itself. Naming a specific mechanism, or new method, or new process, and giving it some interesting name as well. Again, that's best chosen through market research so I can't say exactly but, something like "The "Upside Down Bicycle Method" I Found That "Forces" People to Buy" (as a random example, lol)

Welcome in Alvin! Feel free to reach out anytime :)

@Zimmer Lance Of course :)