https://docs.google.com/document/d/1SqLzMqTNTirD7zoaiB4uADUeyz6jMz6s9wRcq9sRCao/edit?usp=sharing PS- I'll like your comment after I am done reviewing your copy :)
@Mohit Odedra there is a line after "without any purpose just doing it" after that you put so when twice...delete it and change your pv its so vague and rather than just saying describe your inner feelings how you feel before and how you feel after.