@Yuvinalis Njagi thanks for waiting brother. I just read your email. Here are the tweaks to be made. Brother you are confusing the reader. Wanna know why? Because you are not using the language of the market, you are writing for. Let me explain. The sl was Forget Market Crashes. Brother the term market crashes is 99 percent of the time used for stock or crypto market. After reading the email I thought you were writing for trading. Then I read the next line, you mentioned about car that runs perfectly until it breaks and it empties your wallet. Then I thought maybe he is talking about cars. And then I read the next few line, then I understood that you were writing for real estate. Brother you used the car analogy, but that analogy was not good. It confuses the reader rather than explaining the concept. So don't do that. Using listicles, make the bullets 3 only. It's a rule of thumb, it's not a hard and fast rule, it's just better to write it in 3 bullets. It's just a human psychology sort of stuff. Tyson explained this concept. Also explain more about your solution. Your solution was vague. Explain how it will help them. Give a bit more explanation. These are all the points. Cover these mistakes. Also get you copy reviewed by 3 to 4 more people. It's possible that you may get more points to improve

@Abdulrahmon Ishaq thanks g. I mean that's what copy's all about, right? Getting to the pain points and solving the pain/problem.

@Omar Shahid haha, love the consistency brother. Thanks for waiting, anyways let's get back to the review. Brother I saw you used ai, but thus time it was different. It was better. You used little ai in the start of the email. Brother whenever you use chatgpt, it gives to these long dashes"___" Brother remove them from the emails. If a client sees them in your email, he'll fire you right away. This is a clear indicator of chat gpt. And clients don't want ai copy. So plz remove these signs. These signs are no 1 indicator of ai. 2nd thing is that when you write Hey [Firstname], don't write it like this. Write it like this Hey %Firstname%. I know what you are thinking write now, you must be thinking, looks like this man got his head bumped, lol. But there's actually a reason behind it brother. Do you notice, whenever you receive an email from a famous person, it has your name on it. These people probably have millions of people on their email list. How's it possible that everyone receives an email, with only their name on top. That's what "Email Service Provider" software's do. But how does this even link with what I told you. It's actually a feature of all ESPs, that when you write firstname in %%, the ESP automatically replaces it with the firstname of the person receiving it. That's the whole theme behind writing Hey %Firstname%. You can use this feature in the middle of emails as well, anywhere you like. Brother ngl but your email is actually confusing. The concept you started with was good, but then you just confused us all. First you told that you have built muscles but don't feel power in them. Ok that was OK, then you mentioned that people build muscle in gym but not stamina and strength, then in the end of the email you just pitched them the products to increase muscle size. Brother you just mentioned that they are muscular but feel their energy levels are low, but then you pitched them the product of increasing muscle mass. But where's the solution to low energy? Do you get the point I am trying to make here?

@Ayathaba Khumalo appreciate it brother. Always happy to help

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Oh oh, tyson caught dropping value bombs again, lol. Thanks man, it was very helpful