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Feedback on a drafted synopsis appreciated.
Hey everyone, I’ve been building out the world for my wip the ‘Fractured Inheritance Saga’ and wanted to share the synopsis for Book 1: The Fall of Light.
This first book sets up the crash of the Formation Matrix, shows life under the UEA, and introduces the lingering mystery of the Architects. It’s the foundation for the saga, and I’d love to hear what stands out to you.
The intended audience is YA/NA Sci-Fantasy readers — so I’m especially curious if the premise feels accessible and compelling at that level, while still carrying the depth world-builders appreciate.
195 years after the crash of the Universal Formation Crystal, humanity survives within domed cities under the stratocratic United Earth Authority and the shadow influence of the Legacy Council — four powerful families who rose from the Rift Wars. Each year, adolescents are conscripted to New Kyoto, where contact with shards of the Formation awakens abilities that dictate their futures.
Jake Garmin, however, awakens nothing. Branded a non-manifest in a world where power is status, he faces ridicule from peers and reassignment by the Authority. But Jake refuses to let failure define him. Haunted by visions of his missing mother — once a decorated soldier who vanished on a classified mission — he becomes obsessed with uncovering the truth behind her disappearance, even as his father deflects his questions.
Within the Academy, rivalries with Legacy heirs and the constant reminder of class divisions draw Jake into a web of political intrigue, where factions maneuver behind closed doors and every ability is currency. His supposed failure masks a deeper anomaly: a flicker of resonance tied to Phenix, one of the last Architects whose fall seeded the Formation itself.
But the dangers of New Kyoto extend far beyond its walls. Beyond the Dome lies the Southern Ridge — a vast scar of fractured land where crystal resonance has warped creatures into deadly forms. When Jake’s squad is deployed into this wilderness, survival becomes as great a test as politics, and the mystery of the Formation proves more dangerous than anyone dares to admit.
Any feedback back of any kind would be deeply appreciated:)
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Feedback on a drafted synopsis appreciated.
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