Hey man heres my feedback, keep in mind though I am just starting out and really dont have that much knowledge about it all. Hope this still helps: Where I stopped reading – In Email 3 when the story got super detailed, felt a bit too much for me What felt fake – The part where friends texted during the rewrite drama felt made-up Would I click this – Probably Email 2, the steps felt simple and doable If I didn’t reply or buy, what’s missing – Would be cool to see a real example or screenshot of a pitch that worked